I said wait
with little hate
as you test it on us all
if this goes wrong,
we can run to the great hall
Dad can fix it
yes he can
dad can fix it
for he's the man
as long as its a hit
I think we'll like it
<img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/sad.gif" alt="" /> I hate short notices dad <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/cry.gif" alt="" />
I admire your perseverance and endurance Lews. <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/up.gif" alt="" />
Your rhyming skills are getting better every post.
As for the rhythm and syllabic intonation’s wave,
It is really very easy.
Count the syllables in each verse.
I _ said _ wait = 3
with _ lit _tle _ hate = 4
Next = 7
Next = 4
Next = 7
4, 3, 4, 4
5, 5
So I can see you are doing a great effort here Lews. <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/up.gif" alt="" />
But 3,4,7,4,7 _4,3,4,4 _ 5,5
Could be improved to a better level.
Keep it up.