Hopefully some positive critisism:
The concept of using a conversation of a Goddess with a devout servant, in essence has a lot potential. But I don't think it is reached here. All that is being told, is that she blesses him and sends him on his way. You could have spiced up the story, if you'd have thrown in some more characterization. All we learn of the "Adorant" is that he's truthfull, and devout. He seems rather two-dimensional. Also, his truthful worship of his Goddess seems to show some cracks, when he complains her blessing isn't accompanied by trumpets and church bells.
It seems as if you are really afraid your readers won't get what you say. So you keep repeating it, over, and over. The fact that the worshipper is devout, and truthful, is hammered in to the point where it becomes annoying. The same with the form of the Goddess. You only need to tell us once she looks like water and/or glass. And it would be best if you'd make up your mind. Water, or glass.
I'd like to advice you; insert more action, less description. Or at least, less redundant description. The pace of the story is really slow, and the fact that very little actually happens in the story doesn't help it much.
Now, if you were willing to edit this story, I would suggest you insert more awe into the servant, and a lot less ignorance in the Goddess. She seems rather.. childish, for a Goddess. And it isn't exactely clear why she choses this one disciple. Perhaps you could give examples of his piousness, where the Goddess was watching, and have her now commend him for it? And I don't mean just praying. Surely, lipservice enough is not enough to please a diety.
