Elliot:
The absolutely hardest thing in writing is somehow finding the confidence to let other people read your work.
Correct - this is why I show my stuff only to people I trust and know in RL. Not because they are "merciful", but because I know them well enough and they know me.
You see, I believe stories "trigger" the inner worlds, imagination of the reader - so, I choose people, who have a similar world to mine. Therefore, I'd not place them into public.
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Alrik painted a "pastel coloured" story, this was what I felt in the German version - so, I did not think about the reason for this Goddess, I took her as she was - as he described her. I required no further background info, because - as I understood the story - this was not his aim. His aim was the relationship between both protagonists - a sort of snapshot. He made a sketch of her - this was sufficient, the colours came due to their interaction. So, their relationship was idealised to show an archetype. Ok, I can like/dislike this archetype, but does not restrict me from understanding the story. Even if Alrik's story was intended totally different - this was the outcome for me. I do not need brilliant phrases, a lot of descriptions. I take up the atmosphere, c'est tout - and it is a pity, translation missed the atmosphere.
Kiya
If you ask me about the archetype as I understood it: Sorry, I do not believe in faith for faith's sake or in a Goddess thanking this, but do I count? I don't think so, as it is Alrik's adorant and Alrik's Goddess and Alrik's idealism and finally, Alrik's story. And yes, I used these repeats on purpose now.
