I think this is probably going off topic now. Alrik has got the feedback he was after, possibly more than he bargained for, so hopefully he will sit back and take things on board and see what he can do to improve his writing. Don't be despondent Alrik, life is a learning process and sometimes you've got to just roll with the punches. I guess everyone here now knows what they're in for if they should choose to expose their writing to this forum's critics. Perhaps we could start a new thread on the finer points of giving good criticism if there is a genuine desire for it, but I think prolonging this one (I fear) maybe depressing Alrik even more.
