A couple weeks ago, I was on my way out the door to go to church and I grabbed a random notebook because I was running late. I like to take notes on the sermon.

Anyway, I discovered that it was an old notebook from back when I was in high school, and I found a crude beginning to a story I had started writing, probably for my creative writing class, or maybe just because.

It was only two hand written pages long, so there wasn't much to it and I couldn't remember where I had planned on going with it, so I decided to get back into my story writing and see what I could come up with.

So far I've come up with six chapters that's probably around a half hour's worth of reading.

I've shown it to a few friends to get their opinions about it, but I've gotten pretty much no criticism on it. I blame this on them being my friends.

I've uploaded it to my site and would appreciate some feedback on it, if anyone has a chance.

The link is http://themickster.250free.com/chapterone.html

Thanks.

"I've never been a lover, I've always been a fighter. It's high time I fight for love instead of the usual crap reasons I fight for, like my own pride" -- A wise guy