LOL I enjoyed it, reminded me somewhat of a Mickey Spillane Detective Novel, particularly with the 1st person perspective.
Adding it all up I can not find anything else to say(aside from what has been said before) except it is a very promising start, and I think that the fanzine will jump at the chance to continue the story .... Heck, even I want to know what's gonna happen with our despondent Detective <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" />
