Like those codes for the robot 5000 something. Happy kitten angry kitten... what!? Am... am I supposed to laugh or feel sorry for the poor sod who made that contraption?
You do know who made it, right ? Or maybe you were too busy "shedding tears of blood" to notice it?
And while I agree that the common man speaking in a Shakespearean manner can feels odd at time, this is how they chose to make their world. I really don't see how your examples are "better" writing. It's just something else. Quite more "everyday" something else.
And by the way, wasn't the boot camp scene from FMJ more-than-partially improvised ?
