That right there is even worse writing example.
Not surprising really, since you presented that general logic and common sense problem to mistake something written in false, pretentious manner as automatically correct repeatedly so far.
Those examples of writing are not bad because of the mere style they are written in. That has nothing to do with it and is a secondary feature or consideration. Just like nice graphics are not the primary reason why some game is actually good or not.
That writing is bad because its missing the relevant information and it does not represent the actual turn of events at all.
And you intentionally obfuscate them to make it seem like "oh some player could miss it, you know..."
REPEAT MODE ON:
When you question Roberts, you can get to the point where he explains his role in the events - concerning the disappearance of the body. He is completely innocent of it and the money was simply left to him, as a hint that silence is golden. From whoever removed the body. Without Roberts knowledge, help or support.
Therefore as point 1. I should have the option of just leaving money to him.
Instead - i am forced to take it away in one of the three ways, which all lead into RPS minigame.
One of the three choices is to argue he should give money to Berthia to pay her for her sheep he stole and used.
If a player chooses that option - it means he wants that to happen - specifically.
You win the RPS and go to see Berthia. When you start talking to her THERE IS NO OPTION ABOUT GIVING HER MONEY AT ALL!!!
Thats whats wrong, among other things. Not the style or faux, pretentious verbosity saying nothing rolled in a different wrapping.
There is no dialogue lines saying:
"I just talked to Roberts, he admitted stealing your sheep."
B: "Oh, that scallywag! How dare he! The filthy delicious mutton thief! Ill sue him to Aureus! That was my mutton to eat!"
"Hold it. I did bring you the sheep back didnt I? You can still eat it,... with sufficient cooking, or better yet, burning... ugh..."
B: "But, but he stole it! He is a dirty thief!"
"Lets just say he didnt steal it to eat it... Umm... I convinced him to pay a hefty sum of money as a recompense. Would this be enough?"
B: "Oh... that is a lot of money..."
"You can buy a heard of sheep with it Berthia. And need not run off to Aureus either. If he wanted to do anything about your sheep he would have. He didnt. I did. Do we have a deal?"
B: "A whole heard... all that mutton... legs, shoulders, breasts, loins... oh my..."
"Quite so."
B:"He... he didnt do anything you know... untoward... with my little darling, did he? Because if he did Source Hunter I`ll... I`ll..."
"No,no,no... nothing like that i promise you. He killed it. Very fast and quite expertly too. I guess being the mortician he learned a lot about killing and... well, lets just say he was in a bit of a problem and thought a some mutton will solve it. He was wrong."
B: "Ah.. oh... he did? Well, who would have thought that about our Roberts... Expert killer you say? Hmm... and he isnt half bad looking either. Ok, Source Hunter, ill take your deal. Just this once!"
"Good..."
"Wait!... do you think... do you think Roberts likes... mutton? At all?"
- Looks Berthia up and down -
"Im sure he would."
- Tips helmet. -
"Ill take my leave. Mam..."
***
(thats just a quick example where it could go, although a very short, direct and clear form would suffice.)
Common sense and logic would dictate that - since you bloody just bullied and forced someone to give money for that specific purpose - the player would be able to actually say it.
Which would then, as common sense would suggest, affect Berthia decision on whether to go to the cops or not. YOU ARE GIVING HER THAT MONEY AS COMPENSATION and presumably its a very fair sum.
(the exact amount is never disclosed but all concerned describe it as very generous and substantial)
Ergo ipso, etc, etc.
- Discussion finished. I am not writing this for various posters to argue about it, especially not based on wild assumptions of "what i really meant".
Im writing this for devs to notice and maybe think about. Not for someone who is on my ignore list to "try to debunk" or disagree with. Its just annoying having to deal with it lest someone else sees i made no reply and then think you must have "presumed" right.
Moving ON.
