Haven't had time to play, but I took a long pass through the Keywords folder (your dialogs) and gave it a thorough once over. Found lots of little things to clean up, just instances of captilisation, spacing, consistency, readability, clarity, etc. The dialogs should be in pretty good shape now.
The changes are purely corrections for spelling, punctuation and grammar -- I haven't made any changes to your actual story-telling.
Compare side to side with your own Keyword files first if you like, or, if you trust me, just paste it straight over. I'm pretty confident it's in good shape, but there's always the chance I accidentally used an ['] instead of [&a pos;] (without the space) somewhere.
http://www.mediafire.com/download/5qgrg6daboqrx5t/Keywords.zip
