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nope...... <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/biggrin.gif" alt="" />
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whew, ya' know how Virgo was saying his family was murdered by the blood ring? I want to be one of their helpers, like a mage/thief/warrior. Like in <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/div.gif" alt="" />, ya' know the Black Ring? I'm a mixture of Moriendor/Conrelius and chief orc/thief guild should I make a character index thing? to post here.
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ok Jurak, you wanted it, here it is <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/winkwink.gif" alt="" />
Name: Lewis Race: Human Alignment: Chaotic Evil (blood ring member) Traits: greedy, clever, quick Magic skills: invisibllity, fire, lightning, transport Armor: Hands: Black Gauntlets Head: Cloak hood Torso: Cloak, with mirthril armor underneith Feet: Heavy Snakeskin boots legs: nothing, cloak arms, cloak, with amror undernieth weapons: Magic Sword, kills if it touches, shotts lightning secoundary weapons: 5 throwing knives spread around Power: about 500 orcs under command Wealth: about 5000 gold pieces Lives in: Castle, on the edge of the sea Afraid of: Spiders; thats all
what else do you need before I make a practise post?
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Like i said, what will your char contribute too the story and the group. How you see your char evolving in the story. Like you were 'forced' to help them fe. Also make sure your char isnt to powerfull.
Like your sword (kills if toutches) is a bit too powerfull imo. Maybe it has a certain percentage of doing that like 5% chance to kill at once or so. Those orcs under your command, is not a bad idea it just seems like your somekind of god (again too powerfull). Keep that in mind when you write. It will help alot.
Jolie. Paladin on a new crusade.
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yeah, the swqord I only get later, and it makes for exiting sword fights, but I only find it later in the story, I start out with just a magic wand, the orc I try to conserve, for I don't have many, I like to keep them in my castle fortress. but in the opening post, I'm sending out scouts to look fore the sword. and i am mad that Virgo got away from my orcs.
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Something i just thought of. If your going to be a member of that clan, i dont see your char stay long in the story.
Think of something or someway to extend your char so it can keep going after we solve "the black ring member quest".
Also keep in mind that, as your char is now, you are a man of 'power' and we dont really like that (at least i dont <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/badsmile2.gif" alt="" />, unless it is used for good).
Maybe a little hint: try to be yourself in the story. I mean make your char very mutch like yourself. You can have some things that are not 'You', but most of it should be you. It is easier to write and to make a contibution to the story. At least thats what i do. It makes it easier to write and to imagine the story.
I hope it helps a bit.
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yeah, after you brake up the blood ring, than I run away, with like 20 orcs, and you kill them, and hold me hostage, and I join your group, or someones group. you start going after the blood ring, and when you attack me, I see Virgo, and he starts chasing me, and I run for it.
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yes well knslyr...you should plan with virgo about your blood ring thing.. ...he has ideas where the blood ring is concerned.... <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/biggrin.gif" alt="" />
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were is Virgo? <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/ouch.gif" alt="" /> still paying viking war online or what ever its called <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/sad.gif" alt="" /> I need more info to make a practise post <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/sad.gif" alt="" />
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were is Virgo? <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/ouch.gif" alt="" /> still paying viking war online or what ever its called <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/sad.gif" alt="" /> I need more info to make a practise post <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/sad.gif" alt="" /> Medieval Total War: (expansion >>>) Viking Invasion Muahahahahahha its sooo funnnnnnnnnn only bad side its done multiplayer by gamespy........but i got over that after I registered. The game and the expansion are like $30 US dollars each. www.totalwar.com soooo coool <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/shhh.gif" alt="" /> *cough* anyway............................ <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/shhh.gif" alt="" /> <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/shhh.gif" alt="" /> <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/shhh.gif" alt="" /> <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/shhh.gif" alt="" /> Well I don't work saturday and sunday. I guess since everyone <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/rolleyes.gif" alt="" /> is taking my quest so serously................then i could get to work right away and make an outline. May be this would help? *vanishes in a gust of wind again offline without a trace* Whisper in the wind if you need something else.....................................
This is SpArTa!! oh im sorry, I must have took a wrong turn..somewhere...(runs away)
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Well Lewis all you say about your char and quest sounds good, but you're whole story is based on other ones. I mean your char doesnt have anything unique. Something that makes it that char. Fe, for me it was the murder of my family and the sword. After that it chanced into the romance with Willow.
I cant find anything like (not completly) that. I mean you're to mutch depending on another char. You dont have anything that makes that char 'unique' or 'you'. You're build to mutch on another char. Witch has it good sides, but also it bad sides. Make sure you have something to build on except the black ring.
Well these are some of my thoughts on your story, i hope it helps.
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<img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" /> Side Quest <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" /> <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" /> �In the works!� <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" /> The Blood Ring: <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" />(so far �In the works!�) <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" />
Long ago a well respected and successful mercenary group that�s business went far and wide across the land. The mercenary group fought in old wars some ancient and others forgotten. Not many remember the original name but a select few who lived through those dark ages remember the mercenary group as The Band Of The Silver Ring. The Band Of The Silver Ring had now started to take different policies on issues and were now ruled together as one by many different warlords, wizards and shamans.
Major characters: <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" />(so far �In the works!�) <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" />
Goblin Warlord: Gribnick the Black Goblin Shaman: Zorag
Green Orc Warlord: Urgat Rip-Eye Green Orc Warlord: Gorgrhum Snot Black Orc Warlord: Oruk Gutspiller Orc Shaman: Marak
Dwarf Warlord: Harkon Skull-Splitter Dwarf Warlord: Azguz Bloodfist
Elf Warlord: Galed Elf Wizard: Ceridan
Human Wizard: Luther Flamestrike Human Wizard: Marius Uberstrom
Plot affects: <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" />(so far �In the works!�) <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/exclamation.gif" alt="" />
Dark clouds affecting the weather
This is SpArTa!! oh im sorry, I must have took a wrong turn..somewhere...(runs away)
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<img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/up.gif" alt="" /> i like some of the names <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/biggrin.gif" alt="" />
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nice virg.... <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/biggrin.gif" alt="" />
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cool my character has a voice in his head, and he keeps going back and forth bewteween good and bad, so he's very unstable, and crazy; flaming mad. He's been promised to be healed by the blood ring, so he's a member of them, and does there dirty work. he's trying to get a voice out of his head, and he's greedy, very greedy, for money. <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/badsmile2.gif" alt="" />
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I want to do a psot, but I feel that someone else should go first.
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up to date??
ok..... jolie...holiday viper...holiday carrie...holiday nero....is here somewhere luc...m.i.a. womble... m.i.a. virgo_bluefire...m.i.a. meat...here fe...here jvb...here faile...here jurak...here Yeager...here kinslayer13...? was here... gone on another vac. anybody left out?
so jvb maybe you might wanna post <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/think.gif" alt="" />
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where did you get that idea huh? <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/winkwink.gif" alt="" />
i will post tomorrow if everything goes according to plans <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" />
jvb, royal dragon prince
Cheers!
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*appears but then a gust of wind blows by and Virgo is gone*
This is SpArTa!! oh im sorry, I must have took a wrong turn..somewhere...(runs away)
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Well i'm back too, just in case you didnt know it already. <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/biggrin.gif" alt="" /> <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/evilgrin1.gif" alt="" />
Joliekiller, paladin on a crusade against (almost) all evil.
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