Ooh, the plot thickens! (Though my favorite character is gone
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All random which makes it even more fun. 😁
Dice are cruel masters…
The initial cart ride from Eromani’s (I think) point of view is one of the strongest parts of the story, if not the strongest. The single perspective creates a great sense of alienation, which is maintained when perspective changes to other characters in following chapters.
It’s been dropped for a sort of ‘party perspective’, where readers are privvy to the thoughts of the main five. I recommend dipping back into pov chapters. You’ve no lack of perspectives to pick from; a chapter from the point of view of a character who’s scared (Rini or that one commoner) or out of the loop (Derendil) could add interesting tension.
