I have no idea what the career path for a video game writer is (though there does seem to be info on the internet, eg at https://www.gameindustrycareerguide.com/what-does-a-video-game-writer-do/).

But I seriously hope you are not actually considering paying people to look at your work. I would say that anyone who would agree to review writing on that basis is likely to be crooked and should be avoided like the plague.

All the best for your future.

"You may call it 'nonsense' if you like, but I've heard nonsense, compared with which that would be as sensible as a dictionary!"