I said nothing about forgiveness. I say "Remove the subject completely". It does not fit the "Big Hero theme" he goes by. It is even worse than SH's serious contemplation of killing her parents because her wrist hurts. But this is a different matter. The whole idea - beginning with invisible to anyone but Wyll cult of the dragon and ending with Duke being angry... for what exactly? That Mizora is following Wyll around? - is ridiculous and makes poor guy, well, pathetic.
Re-write him!
He had a fall out with his father and has a chance to reconnect. That is a total reliable thing. This is not pathetic at all. The pact with Mizora is ok for me too - maybe explain a bit more, why she wanted Wyll as her walrock so badly, but other than that, it is ok.
"We are all stories in the end. Just make it a good one."
