What you've just written is sooo beautiful! Great idea to wait a little bit with Withers arrival and give some time for grief. All companions should be devastated, after all we were travelling for weeks or months together and most of us became friends. And our love interest should be broken and in tears, not believing in our death.
After that Withers' intervention would be much more intensive and rewarding. And of course dialogues after revival should be more intense, to match our companions reactions during the whole scene.
