Faralas...
I think I am going to have to disagree with you at least a little here. Too much description can kill a fight scene stone dead, especially when written from the POV of the main protagonist. A good fight scene needs a sense of rapidity far more than it needs accurate descriptions. It is also necessary to capture the protagonist's 'voice' in these scenes, which does not always make for perfect English, regardless of the talent (Or otherwise) of the writer.
I don't think I said that action scenes require a LOT of descriptive words. In fact, I was hoping to say that if you need to use them, be prudent. Choose wisely. Less is best and use short sentences.
Also, GlanceALot states this is PART of a story, not the whole of it, so the lead in and lead out sentences don't have to make enormous sense, as they probably work far better in the context of the whole piece.
Point taken. I already was aware of that fact. But wasn't sure if the knights were absolutely necessary. I told him to disregard anything that didn't work for
him - not you - him.
Lastly, if something bites down hard on mithril armour, some tooth damage is quite reasonable speculation on the part of the protagonist. None of us think in facts
all the time, after all <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" />
I'm not stupid, Elliot. I know that teeth can break when biting down on armor. It might pay you to re-read exactly what I wrote.
Ah, differences of opinion! Don't ya love 'em? <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/biggrin.gif" alt="" />
In this case, no. You've misread what took me nearly half an afternoon to dissect. I have no problems with editing someone else's work when it is asked. I do have problems with others who chime in on another person's critique. I was simply offering my professional opinion.
Faralas <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/mage.gif" alt="" />
