You actually did very well, Glance <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" /> I think there are at most 5-6 words that aren't quite right in the whole piece. I could certainly tell it had been written in English because it doesn't read like a translation at all - no awkwardness.
I also figured others would point out the specifics, but I will certainly do that if no-one else cares to <img src="/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" />
