Originally Posted by DistantStranger
Originally Posted by Firesnakearies
Originally Posted by DistantStranger
I think the game works incredibly well as it is. My only real objection is I would like greater reactivity of choices and their consequences, a lot tighter writing, more nuance in the storytelling, and appreciate more convincing characters. For me, everything more or less works well enough that all anything needs is a little fine tuning, but the writing is just so. . .mediocre. However, I have been fascinated with history and the humanities all my life and I imagine my standards for excellence are somewhat higher than the typical consumer for this type of project.



Not gonna lie, I don't even know what the phrase "tighter writing" means.


Think Hemingway. Choosing efficacy over the extraneous. Poetry and prose have their place, but when they become distracting or directionless they can fatigue the reader. At that point, one needs to pare back on their composition. Its shedding the fat, because lean writing can do more work with greater efficiency.



Ah, now I see why I didn't know what it meant. I'm incapable of writing like that. I can't even make a shopping list without it becoming a 10,000-word novella. To me, more words is always better.